Hi 516merchandise,
I'm no expert on eBay listings but there wasn't really anything wrong with yours. The only thing that may be stopping buyers from buying your product is that your shipping rate seems pretty high compared to other listings selling the same product as you are.
Here are a couple of posts that have great tips on how you can increase traffic to your listings/store:
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Hope this helps. All the best! :)